Lower the line graph shows the percentage of tourist to England who visited for not similar attractions in Brighton.

Lower the line graph shows the percentage of tourist to England who visited for not similar attractions in Brighton.
Lower the line graph shows the percentage of
tourist
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tourists
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to England who visited for not similar attractions in Brighton. We can see that
pier
in the
last
place, and in the first place is
pavilion
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a pavilion
the pavilion
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.
This
graph line shows us that the situation happened between 1980 to 2010.
Pavillion
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The pavillion
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in 1980 was 25% but after
few
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a few
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years
is
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it
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steadily
rise
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rose
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to
the
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apply
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50% in 1995.
By contrast
festival
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the festival
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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start
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started
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with
the
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apply
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30% and is the highest start. The trend for the festival was similar to the pavilion.
Percentage
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The percentage
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of tourists to
pier
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the pier
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was lower than
other
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in other
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places. Tourists to the
pier
rise
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have risen
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significantly.
Pier
starts with 10% from 1980 to 2010. Piers graph
also
ended the year up from 10% to 22%. But by the way art gallery was the least popular. It was steadily fall from 22% to 7%
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pier with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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