Eating too much of sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is the responsibility of government to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that it is an individual responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Consumption of

suger

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sugar

is too

comman

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common

thesedays

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these days

,

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it is harmful

for

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to

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health

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. Some people believe that government should do something to

control

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the usage of

sugar

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,

while

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others

thinks

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that it is the

responsibilty

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responsibility

of an individual to minimize the consumption of sweets. I believe that it should be controlled by

an individuals

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individuals

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.

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with, it is the duty of the government to

control

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the

sugar

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in the country because people are paying huge

amount

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amounts

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of taxes to the local

authorites

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authorities

authority

so they have to provide better

health

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services to their citizens.

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,

Singpore

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Singapore

is the country which banned the

advertisment

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advertisement

of cold drinks and things, which contains

the

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a

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high level of

sugar

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due to

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that there are

less

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fewer

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cases of diabetes as compared to other countries.

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, limiting the

sugar

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level can

rise

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raise

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the fitness level of

humanbiengs

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human beings

.

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, it is very hard for

government

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the government

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to

control

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every individual

sugar

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usage because every person has their own preference and they have to right choose

whetever

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whatever

they want to purchase.

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, many model and

sport

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sports

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stars choose healthy food rather than eating food which

contain

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contains

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sugar

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because they know

sugar

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is harmful

for

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to

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their body .

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,people are responsible for

the

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their

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health

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. In conclusion,

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some pupils

thinks

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that

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the governement

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governement

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government

governments

have

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to take some action to

control

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the

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apply

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sugar

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,

but

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i

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I

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belief

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believe

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that every single person should take care of their diet and

health

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