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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of free
time
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 enjoyed by males and
females
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 of five different kinds of employment status.
Overall
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 it can be seen that the most popular who preferred to enjoy in free
time
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 were people who did not work and people who are retired ,
whereas
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 people who have a job in full
time
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 have the lowest amount of free
time
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 to enjoy.
To begin
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 with, males and
females
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 who are unemployed and retired have the same amount of leisure
time
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 to have fun which was around 80 males and 78
females
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. The most interesting notice is that there are no men
in
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employed
part-timetime
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part-time
 and in housewives around 50
females
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 preferred to enjoy in free
time
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 as housewives and in employed
part-timetime
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part-time
40.
On the other hand
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, there are men
in
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employed full-
time
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time
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 approximately 44 ,
while
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females
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 are around 38.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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