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The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the fields of jobs in Canada in the age group 25 to 35 and the second one is 45 to 55.
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, most of the post-school qualificators still decide to choose social
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 and arts. The proportions of maths and engineering had changed. One decreased and the other one improved. As shown in the second illustration, the number of humans is nearly 213,400 and most of them choose social
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 with 21%.
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 the second place has engineering with approximately 19%. Education was chosen by 13% of workers and administration by 15%.
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 wasn't popular, so they
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 to work in nursing, which has 11%. As seen in the first pie chart, the number of people in
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 age group is much more, by two times, approximately 515,600 individuals. Social
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 still has the best result,
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, after that administration and computers have almost the same index, 20%, 19% and 18%, respectively. The education field is the fourth most popular amongst youngsters, with nearly 15%. Other professions had 28%, and they are engineering, humanities, nursing, MBA and others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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