The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in liters in selected countries for the period 1960-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in liters in selected countries for the period 1960-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two graphs illustrate trends in daily smoking rates and alcohol
consumptions
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consumption
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(in
liters
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litres
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per
persons
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) from 1960 to 2000 for various
country’s
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countries
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. The first graph reveals
an
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consistent decline in smoking across the
USA
, Japan, and
Holland
. In 1960, Japan
have
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the highest smoking rate at 60%,
while
Holland
had the lowest rate
of
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40%. By 2000, smoking has significantly
decrease
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in all
country’s
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countries
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, with Japan and
USA
showing nearly identical
rate’s
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rates
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, both around 20%.
In contrast
, the second graph
present
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alcohol consumption trends in Turkey,
Holland
, and
USA
. Between 1960 and 1980, all countries experienced
an
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sharp rise in
consumptions
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consumption
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, peeking around 1980. The
USA
shown
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the highest consumption at over 10
liters
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litres
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,
while
Turkey
remaining
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below 2
liters
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throughout
this
periods
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period
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. In
conclusions
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,
smoking
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the smoking
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rate’s
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dropped
consistent
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consistently
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,
while
alcohol
consumptions
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consumption
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increased until 1980 before
declined
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in
Holland
and
USA
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the USA
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, but
remains
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remained
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steady in Turkey.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, holland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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