The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in liters in selected countries for the period 1960-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs illustrate trends in daily smoking rates and alcohol
consumptions
(in Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
liters
per Change the spelling
litres
persons
) from 1960 to 2000 for various Fix the agreement mistake
person
country’s
.
The first graph reveals Change noun form
countries
an
consistent decline in smoking across the Change the article
a
USA
, Japan, and Holland
. In 1960, Japan have
the highest smoking rate at 60%, Wrong verb form
had
while
Holland
had the lowest rate of
40%. By 2000, smoking has significantly Change preposition
at
decrease
in all Change the verb form
decreased
country’s
, with Japan and Change noun form
countries
USA
showing nearly identical rate’s
, both around 20%.
Change noun form
rates
In contrast
, the second graph present
alcohol consumption trends in Turkey, Replace the word
presents
Holland
, and USA
. Between 1960 and 1980, all countries experienced an
sharp rise in Change the article
a
consumptions
, peeking around 1980. The Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
USA
shown
the highest consumption at over 10 Add the auxiliary verb
showed
has shown
liters
, Change the spelling
litres
while
Turkey remaining
below 2 Wrong verb form
remained
liters
throughout Change the spelling
litres
this
periods
.
In Fix the agreement mistake
period
conclusions
, Fix the agreement mistake
conclusion
smoking
Add an article
the smoking
rate’s
dropped Change noun form
rate
consistent
, Change the word
consistently
while
alcohol consumptions
increased until 1980 before Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
declined
in Change the form of the verb
declining
Holland
and USA
, but Correct article usage
the USA
remains
steady in Turkey.Wrong verb form
remained
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, holland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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