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The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the information on the
percentage
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 of Canadians who gave money to charitable organisations by
age
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 range for the years 2000 and 2015. To commence with the
age
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group
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 from 18 to 24 the
percentage
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 was 20% in 2000 but decreased in 2015. moving with the
age
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group
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 of 25 to 34 was 30% in the year 2000 and 25% in 2015.
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, the
percentage
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 increased in the
age
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group
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 of 35 to 49 which was around 40% in 2000 and 35% in 2015
In addition
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, the
age
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group
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 between 50 to 64
percentage
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 of charity has dropped to at least 35% and 40% in 2000 and 2015 respectively.
Lastly
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, people
agedage
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aged
 65 and over had a
percentage
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 of 30% in the year 2000 and 35% in 2015 . In conclusion, the
age
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group
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 of 25 to 34 seems to be least charitable and the people of Canada aged between 35 to 69 have the highest
percentage
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 of charity.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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