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The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams demonstrate how to initiate electricity from
wave
 power by
system
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the system
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. The two diagrams consist of
chamber
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a chamber
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,
wave
,
air
,
turbine
, column, cliff, and electric which are located in the sea wall.
Overall
, the two diagrams display the motion of
turbine
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the turbine
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 in the ebbing tide to generate the electricity. The difference between
two
Correct article usage
the two
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 pictures is the
air
 in the column which is going up and down followed by
wave
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a wave
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. The electric power is gained by
this
 activity.
To begin
 with, the
wave
 tide to the
chamber
,
it
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apply
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creates the
air
 in the
chamber
 to go up and motions the
turbine
.
Furthermore
,
this
 motion produces the electricity in diagram A.
However
, diagram B shows the opposite of diagram A. The
air
 in the column is going down, it makes
turbine
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the turbine
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 move and the
wave
recede
Correct subject-verb agreement
recedes
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 to the
chamber
.
This
 movement produces the
electricty
Correct your spelling
electricity
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave, chamber, air, turbine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 5 times.
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