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You recently bought some food at a supermarket, but, when you got home, you found that the food was in bad condition. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter, – explain what happened to you – give details of the day and time of the purchase – ask the manager what he/she intends to do about your experience

#food #supermarket #home #condition #manager #time #purchase
My name is Xurshidbek and I am writing to request your assistance concerning the
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 of I
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rented
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 a purchase I must apologise your
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troubling
 you with
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 and taking up your
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valuable
 time.
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 there are some points which should be discussed and The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is that you have to fill with good quality products in your shop.
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 the serious. I expect a positive result I hope that my request you will not
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inconvenience
 you
to
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 much. I would appreciate it if you could look into the
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 and inform me as soon as possible. You could
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 the
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 information to my email or fax. e-mail or fax. I look forward to receiving your
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 reply and
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 resolution in
this
matter
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 your earliest
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convenience
. Please do not
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hesitate
 to contact me should you require
further
 information. Thank you in
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advance
 for your assistance.
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 faithfully Xurshidbek
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task achievement
Provide more specific details about the purchase, such as what was bought and the exact issue with the food.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer transitions between points to ensure the letter flows smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for typos and grammatical errors that can impact clarity.
coherence and cohesion
The letter includes a polite closing and expresses expectation for a resolution.
task achievement
The request for resolution is clear and respectful, showing an appropriate tone.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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