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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart compares the
expenses
on
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 5 areas made by people who
live
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lived
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 in four countries in 2009.
Overall
, housing was the category with the highest
expenses
whereas
 healthcare and clothing were significantly lower than other categories. The US had the highest share of expenditure on housing with just above a quarter. Followed by the UK which allocated
for
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slightly below a quarter.
Canada
 and Japan's housing
expenses
 were around 20%. Japan accounted
approximately
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 23% of
expenses
 for food.
Moreover
, the UK had one out of five share of food
expenses
.
Meanwhile
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Canada
 and the US spent less than 15%
for
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on
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 food.
Canada
 had 20% of
expenses
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the expenses
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 made for transportation
whereas
 the other regions
ony
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only
 spent less than 20%.
In contrast
, the expenditure for both healthcare and clothing did not reach 10% in all countries. The highest spend
to
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 healthcare was made by the US with 7%.
Furthermore
,
Canada
 spent just above 5%
in
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on
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 clothing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses, canada with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure proportions
  • key categories
  • emerged as the leading category
  • expenditure share
  • cultural or economic differences
  • disproportionately high
  • unique healthcare structure
  • spending habits
  • claimed the largest share
  • relatively consistent
  • devoting the smallest percentage
  • distinct distributions
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