The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.
The bar graph illustrates the percentages of expenses in five particular sectors in four countries (
USA
,
Canada
, the
UK
and
Japan
) in 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that housing was the number-one category on the list,
while
health care saw the lowest points. Another interesting change is that clothing witnessed almost the same point in all countries. Looking at the details, the
USA
and the
UK
were slightly as popular as
Canada
and
Japan
, 27%, 24%, 21% and 23%, respectively.
However
, healthcare registered a minimal percentage. The
USA
was twice as high as
Canada
.
Likewise
,
Canada
demonstrated 4% and the
UK
saw only 2%, making it the least well-known category. Regarding the other categories, in food ,
Japan
(23%) was nowhere near as high as the
USA
(14%),
whereas
the United Kingdom (20%) was slightly
popular
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more popular
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than
Canada
(15%).
Moreover
, in housing,
Canada
and
Japan
saw similar percentages (23%),
whereas
the figures for the United States were 26%, and the
UK
were 24%.
A
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The
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final sector is clothing,
Japan
and the United States witnessed similar points (4%).
Similarly
,
Canada
and the US
also
registered the same percentages (6%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, canada, uk, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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