The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant

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The given line graph depicts the proportion of holidaymakers, who

visted

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visited

four

distict

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distinct

district

attraction

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attractions

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incuding

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including

art

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an art

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gallery,pavilion, pier, and festival in Brighten in England over two decades.

Overall

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, visiting

pavilion

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the pavilion

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was

the

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popular

attractions

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attraction

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among visitors and despite, its steady trend over

period

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the period

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festival

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the festival

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saw more holidaymakers, compared to other destinations. Art

gallery

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galleries

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on the other hand

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, had the lowest

visitors

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number of visitors

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during

this

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period.

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the line

grapg

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graph

, in 1980, art

gallery

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galleries

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had just over 20

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percent

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per cent

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, which rose to nearly below 40

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percent

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per cent

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. After that, it fell sharply to 20

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percent

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per cent

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. between 1990 and 2000, there was almost a steady trend, which declined dramatically to approximately 9

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percent

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per cent

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. In 1980, the percentage of visiting

pier

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the pier

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was 10

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percent

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per cent

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, after which it saw a slight fluctuation

then

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reach

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reached

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apply

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just over 20

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percent

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per cent

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. In 1995, there was a peak of roughly 48

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percent

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per cent

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in the ratio of pavilion visitors

then

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it had a sharp fall in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

159 words

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