The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant
The given line graph depicts the proportion of holidaymakers, who
visted
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visited
four
distict
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distinct
district
attraction
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attractions
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,
incuding
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including
art
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an art
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gallery,pavilion, pier, and festival in Brighten in England over two decades.
Overall
, visiting
pavilion
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the pavilion
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was
the
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a
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popular
attractions
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attraction
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among visitors and despite, its steady trend over
period
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the period
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,
festival
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the festival
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saw more holidaymakers, compared to other destinations. Art
gallery
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galleries
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,
on the other hand
, had the lowest
visitors
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number of visitors
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during
this
period.
According to
the line
grapg
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graph
, in 1980, art
gallery
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galleries
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had just over 20
percent
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per cent
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, which rose to nearly below 40
percent
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per cent
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. After that, it fell sharply to 20
percent
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per cent
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. between 1990 and 2000, there was almost a steady trend, which declined dramatically to approximately 9
percent
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per cent
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. In 1980, the percentage of visiting
pier
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the pier
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was 10
percent
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per cent
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, after which it saw a slight fluctuation
then
it
reach
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to
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apply
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just over 20
percent
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per cent
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. In 1995, there was a peak of roughly 48
percent
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per cent
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in the ratio of pavilion visitors
then
it had a sharp fall in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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