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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar charts present the proportion of
employment
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 in
Japan
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,
USA
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, Australia and
Belgium
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.
Both
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men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 were included in the study.
Overall
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,
Japan
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 has the highest proportions of employed
men
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 and
women
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 in the years 1970 and 2000.
In contrast
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, the lowest percentages of males aged 60-64 in
employment
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 are from the
USA
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 in 1970 and
Belgium
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 in 2000.
Additionally
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, the lowest rate of working ladies aged 60-64 in 1970 and 2000 are
both
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 from
Belgium
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. In detail, in 1970,
Japan
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 had the highest proportion of
men
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 aged 60-64 with
84
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%
employment
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 rate.
This
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 was followed by Belgians with 79%.
Both
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 the
USA
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 and Australia accumulated a fraction less than 75%. In 2000,
Japan
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similarly
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 was the country with the greatest share of 76% of 60-64 year-old
men
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 with occupation. In the
USA
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, more than half of Americans were working in 2000
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55% which was near to
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47% of Australia.
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, four times lower than
Japan
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 was
Belgium
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 with only 19%, it was the lowest percentage of boys working in 2000.
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Furthermore
,
employment
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 rates of females aged 60-64 were closer to each other. The highest proportion was from
Japan
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both
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 in 1970 with 43% and in 2000 with 40%. Next was the
USA
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 with adjacent percentages of 36% and 38% in 1970 and 2000.
However
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, 60-64 year old Australian
women
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 were reported with less than 20%.
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, with under 10%,
Belgium
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 was the lowest country of
women
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 aged 60-64 with
job
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jobs
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, japan, usa, belgium, both, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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