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The chart below shows how the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the change
of
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in
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minutes
 of phone
conserations
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consultations
for
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in
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 the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
,
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 the
conversations
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 time fluctuated for the local-fixed
line
, it gradually
rised
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raised
rose
rises
 for
National
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the National
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 and international- fixed
line
 from 1995 to 2002. Calls duration for the local- fixed
line
 had
a
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 upper trend from the
beginnig
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beginning
 of the period until 1999. After
peaked
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on
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at
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 90
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1999 it started to
fell
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 until
he
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it
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 had the same
value
 with
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a started
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started
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 point
as
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at
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 72
billionss
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billion
billions
minutes
. The
calls
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call
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 time for National and international- fixed
line
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lines
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 started to period with
thirty five
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thirty-five
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billions
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billion
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minutes
 which
its
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was its
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 lowest
value
then
 it increased gradually. It peaked in 2022 with almost
sity
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sixty
city
 one
billions
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billion
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minutes
. Cell phone's
value
 started with two
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995 and rose steadily between 1995 and 1998. After
then
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 it went up sharply and had
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the higghest
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higghest
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highest
value
 with nearly
forty five
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forty-five
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bilions
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billion
minutes
 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, billions, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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