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The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps depict the alteration of
Midowside
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 and
Fonton
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villages
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, which have occurred between 1962 and the present.
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, both
Midowside
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 and
Fonton
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villages
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 have expanded with the passage of time, and eventually, these
villages
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had
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combined before the
year
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 1986.
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, considerable modifications in infrastructure, housing, and facilities can be seen in these maps during
this
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 period. In the
year
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 1962, these
villages
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 were completely separated with no roads or railways.
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,
Fonton
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 had railways that passed through north of
this
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 village
in
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this
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year
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.
Midowside
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,
moreover
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, was situated at the northwest of the area. Looking at the
year
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 1985, one road was constructed between these
villages
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.
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, not only was
Midowside
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 widened, but superstore, leisure, and housing estates
also
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 were developed in
this
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 village. Currently,
Midowside
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 is known as
Midowside
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 Suburbs after combining with
Fonton
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.
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, a hotel, a bank, and a business park have been built in the left and
center
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 of
this
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 place.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words midowside, fonton, villages, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural area
  • expansion
  • infrastructure
  • commercial development
  • housing development
  • population growth
  • key landmarks
  • transformation
  • local community
  • economy
  • environmental impact
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