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The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.
#percentage #household #accommodation #england #whales
The presented bar chart shows data about the number of households
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purchased and occupied compromise in England and Wales in almost 10 decades.
Overall
, the percentage of citizens who rented houses
decline
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 rapidly,
however
, the quantity of those people who owned accommodation increased dramatically. The rate of
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 who hired houses
were
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 more than
three-quarter
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 in 1918.It was the majority rate in the years.
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,
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borrowing continued to fall sharply.Even so, the given rate of
household
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households
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 who lent was equal between 1991 and 2001 years, but, the numbers were a little higher in 2011 year. The
percent
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 of
population
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 who bought homes was going up speedily.Only, in 1939 between 1953 were
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 results.
Thereafter
, the bar chart represents a growth process.The apartments for sale were about 70% in 2001,
on the other hand
, there was not
such
 a difference in 1991 year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • rental accommodation
  • economic conditions
  • housing policies
  • cultural shifts
  • historical events
  • supply and demand
  • demographic shifts
  • urbanization
  • patterns
  • trends over time
  • housing market dynamics
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