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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The line indicates data on global water
use
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 by
sector
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;
moreover
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, compares the water consumption in two different countries :
Brazil
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 and the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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 in 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that every
sector
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 has an increase rate in every year. Alternatively, the average population,irrigated land and amount of water destruction per person in
Brazil
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 is the largest number than other land.
To begin
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 with, the greatest quantity of global aqua
use
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 in the
sector
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 is agriculture
wheres
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where
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 in the start period had around 5000 km3; despite, in 1970 the cost of
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sector
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 was tiniest reduced at about 1500km3 and the biggest total is in the moment 2000 with close to 2500 km3. Meanwhile, industry and domestic have a similar percentage
such
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 as in the 1900 until 1950.
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, in 1980 is noticeable to see that the numeral of industrial
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approximately
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 600km3 and domestic
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 only 500km3.
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, the external portion in these two countries;
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, the national in
Brazil
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 is more than
Congo
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 briefly quadruple tas, an irrugated city in
Brazil
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 has an area of some 26500 km3
on the other hand
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 area of
Congo
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 just 100 km3 and Ho2 consumption personal in
Brazil
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 have roughly 359 m3 and
Congo
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 with circa 8m3.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, sector, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • distribution
  • agriculture
  • industry
  • domestic
  • sector
  • trends
  • discrepancies
  • sustainability
  • resource management
  • environmental impact
  • efficient
  • scarce
  • irrigation
  • desalination
  • sanitation
  • water-intensive
  • renewable resource
  • per capita
  • infrastructure
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