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The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The provided line graph illustrates the proportion of
Internet
 used by the residents of three different countries, where the countries were the
USA
,
Canada
 and
Mexico
 in
years
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the years
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 1990 and 2009.
To begin
 with, in 1999 the
use
 of
Internet
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the Internet
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 was around ten in twenty per cent, one in ten per cent and a fifth per cent in
Mexico
,
Canada
 and the
USA
 respectively. After 1999,
Mexico
 showed a slight upward trend in the
use
 of the
internet
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Internet
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 and reached a two-fifths percentage in the year 2009.
On the other hand
, with regard to
Canada
 and
USA
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the USA
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 in the initial years the
use
 of
Internet
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the Internet
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 in
Canada
 was less than
the
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in the
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USA
,
however
 after 2001
Canadacanada
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Canada
 showed a sharp incline and touched its top percentage of 100%.
Whereas
,
USA
 was highest in the embark year, but after 2001 it took the second number and in the year 2009 the statistics of
internet
use
 was four-fifths percentage.
Overall
, it can be easily seen
Mexico
 was the only nation that had fewer users from
start
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the start
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 of the period till the end.
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