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The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the proportion of
Internet
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 used by the residents of three different countries, where the countries were the
USA
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,
Canada
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 and
Mexico
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 in
years
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the years
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 1990 and 2009.
To begin
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 with, in 1999 the
use
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 of
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Internet
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the Internet
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 was around ten in twenty per cent, one in ten per cent and a fifth per cent in
Mexico
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,
Canada
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 and the
USA
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 respectively. After 1999,
Mexico
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 showed a slight upward trend in the
use
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 of the
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internet
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Internet
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 and reached a two-fifths percentage in the year 2009.
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, with regard to
Canada
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 in the initial years the
use
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 of
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in
Canada
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 was less than
the
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in the
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USA
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,
however
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 after 2001
Canadacanada
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Canada
 showed a sharp incline and touched its top percentage of 100%.
Whereas
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,
USA
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 was highest in the embark year, but after 2001 it took the second number and in the year 2009 the statistics of
internet
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use
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 was four-fifths percentage.
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, it can be easily seen
Mexico
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 was the only nation that had fewer users from
start
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the start
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 of the period till the end.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, usa, canada, mexico, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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