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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020.
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illustruates
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illustrates
 the manufacture and
consumption
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 of
rice
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 in different countries in 2020.
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 the largest quantities of
consumption
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 and
production
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was
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on
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 Hungary.
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, South Korea showed the least interest in
rice
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while
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rice
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cousumption
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consumption
 and
production
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vary
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 the most in
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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. Starting with Hungary,the number of
rice
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production
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 topped the survey with 540
tonnes
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,but consumer spending on
rice
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 was
also
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remarkable
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 high reaching 532
tonnes
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.The total in Phillippines occupied the second
ranking-position
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 with 410
tonnes
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production
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 and 387
tonnes
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consumption
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 respectively,but the number of
consumption
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 was not as many as
production
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 which was the biggest
differences
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difference
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 among these counties. Turning now to India,the
production
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 and
consumption
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was
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 nowhere near as many as Phillippines
that
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 was in third place reaching 106
tonnes
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production
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 and 104
tonnes
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consumption
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.
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,Tunisia,Pakistan,Vietnam,Zambia and Bangladesh followed.South Korea was in the minority with only 49
tonnes
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production
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of production
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 and 45
tonnes
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consumption
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of consumption
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, rice, production, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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