The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two pie graphs illustrate the proportion of the sales for a retail centre in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. The biggest percentages were dedicated to travel and film/music in 2003 and 2013, respectively.
On the contrary
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, the lowest amount was for books and clothes in these years. The books had 19% of the total sales in 2003 and increased by 3 percent in 2013.
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,
clothes'
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clothes
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sale
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sales
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experienced a decline
by
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roughly 8
percent
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per cent
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. It had almost a quarter of the total
sellings
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selling
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in 2003.
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, film and music proportions had the highest increase from 21% to 33% in 2013. It can be seen that the greatest amount of sales belonged to
travel
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the travel
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option, but it changed to media-related products over these 10 years. Products related to travelling
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covered approximately two-thirds of the pie chart in 2003 and changed to a little more than a quarter in 2013.
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