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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The graph and table illustrate global
water
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consumption
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 across three sectors—agriculture, industrial
use
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, and domestic
use
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—between 1900 and 2000,
as well as
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 a comparison of
water
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 usage in
Brazil
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 and the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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 in the year 2000. The graph shows a steep rise in agricultural
water
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use
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 after 1950, which far surpasses both industrial and domestic
consumption
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. By 2000, agricultural
use
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 reached nearly 3,000 km³,
while
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 industrial
use
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 clime steadily but remained under 1,000 km³. Domestic
use
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 remains the lowest, increasing only slightly. The table provides a snapshot of
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in 2000.
Brazil
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, with a much larger population (176 million), uses significantly more
water
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 per person (359 m³) and has much more irrigated land (26,500 km²) than
Congo
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.
In contrast
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,
Congo
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’s population of 5.2 million consume just 8 m³ per person, with only 100 km² of irrigated land. In summary, global
water
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consumption
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 is dominated by agriculture.
According to
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 presented
data
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data,
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Brazil
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 consumes more
water
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 per person more than 40 times (353
square
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 meters) than Kongo (8
square
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 meters),
additionally
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, there is 26500
square
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 km of irrigation land there,
while
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 the Republic of
Congo
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 has only 100
square
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 kilometres.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, use, brazil, congo, square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • distribution
  • agriculture
  • industry
  • domestic
  • sector
  • trends
  • discrepancies
  • sustainability
  • resource management
  • environmental impact
  • efficient
  • scarce
  • irrigation
  • desalination
  • sanitation
  • water-intensive
  • renewable resource
  • per capita
  • infrastructure
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