Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. ag

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

 The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. ag
The pie charts give data about ways of transportation to one university for work,
study
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and study
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in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.
Overall
, in five years only
percentage
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the percentage
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of people who used
car
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a car
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were
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decreased and
other
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the other
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categories increased. In 2004,
Proportion
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the Proportion
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of car users was the highest , 51 per
cent
, but it declined and showed 28 per
cent
in 2009.
Second
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The second
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popular
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most popular
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kind of transport was
bus
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the bus
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with 33 per
cent
in 2004. In
this
year, bicycle method of transportation for 9 per
cent
,
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the relatively
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relatively
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percentage of walking and travelling
on
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by
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train were 4 and 3 per
cent
. In 2009,
bus
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the bus
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amounted to almost half of
methods
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the methods
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, 46 per
cent
.
Proportion
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The proportion
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of cycling changed significantly
16
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by 16
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per
cent
, became more
for
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by
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7 per
cent
. There
was
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were
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4%
of
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apply
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travelling
on
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by
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train,
also
, 6%
of
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apply
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walking which
are
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is
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more for few per
cent
than it was five years ago.
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