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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides information about customer
service
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hotel
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hotels
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 in 5 categories : Excellent, Satisfactory,
very poor
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Very Poor
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, Good and
poor
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Poor
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 between 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, as can be seen, Satisfactory had a
signaficant
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significant
portions
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portion
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.
while
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,
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apply
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 very poor
service
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 received a
fewer
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apply
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relatively
proportion
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lower proportion
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.
However
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,other types had different Patterns.
It is clear that
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, in 2005,
parkway
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Parkway Hotel
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hotel
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 had a satisfactory level
around
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of around
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 45% it was
a
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the
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 highest point.
However
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, it had
spending
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spent
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 21% of poor
service
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more
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apply
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than in 2010
, .
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,
.
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In addition
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 vere poor and good were nearly Some percentage.
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Hotel
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The hotel
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 had 5 points
in
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for
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 excellent
service
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, There were significant shifts in
hotel
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service
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.
Costumer
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Customer
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 love serving hotels had
a good portions
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a good portion
good portions
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 under the 40%.
Secondly
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,
excellent
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the excellent
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 part was around a quarter more than
befor
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before
. Satisfactory and poor were nearly the same number from 12% to 17%
Finally
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, very poor had 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words service, hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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