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The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented data depicts the proportion of six internet activities based on different
age
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 groups from teens to above 70 years old. In general, all kind of internet uses fluctuated in all
age
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 groups except for downloading
musics
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music
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 and videos. E-mail had the highest percentage in all life stages,
whereas
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 the reverse was the case for searching for
people
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. In the
age
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 of 50s,
people
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 mostly used electronic messages, reaching about 94%,
while
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 for teenagers, the number was 4% less (90%).
In contrast
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, travel reservations
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 not used at all by teens, proven by a perfect zero score. Searching for
people
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also
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 hit its all-time low in the youngest
age
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 groups.
Lastly
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, online
purchasement
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purchases
 were mainly used by the
age
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 of 20 to 60.
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, for online games, the older the
people
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 are, the
least
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 they
performed
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 in
this
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 act. It started
from
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with
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 52 %
in
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of
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 teenagers and ended
in
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at
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 6% for seventy's
age
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 group. Similar to
this
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, music and videos download had a 52% scale, and dropped to 6% in the latest
age
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 group.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
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