The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented line chart indicates the annual number of Pizzas, Fish and Chips, and
Hamburgers
eaten by Australian adolescents in two and a half decades.
Overall
, Both Pizza
and Hamburgers
had an upward trends
with a gradual increase. Correct the article-noun agreement
an upward trend
upward trends
On the other hand
, Fish and Chips number declined by the end of 2000, and it became the least favourable food compared to the other two.
At
the beginning, Change the preposition
In
Pizza
and Hamburgers
started at just above zero, and both gradually increased until the end of the period, and the two reached approximately 80 and 100 respectively. Pizza
remained static in the last
5-month
.
Correct your spelling
5 months
On the other hand
, Fish and Chips was at its peak at first,
but it dipped for the next 5 years. It slightly increased around 1980 to 1985, then
the number declined again throughout the period. Furthermore
, it got outnumbered by Hamburgers
in 1985, and Pizza
in 1990, before finally
hitting its all-time low at the end
of 2000.Submitted by 000silr111 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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