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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target ( what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target ( what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
had
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showed the
accurancy
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accuracy
 between the expectation and
reality
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the average
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 bus arriving time of a bus company
during
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from
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 1999 to 2003.
Overall
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,the biggest gap
about
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between
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the acutual
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acutual
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actual
 and
target
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 could be seen in 2000,
while
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 2003
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witnessed the minimum.What's more, the desired percentage had decreased year by year, but the actual
accurancy
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accuracy
 nearly didn't change over 5 years.
Actual
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 percentage of services arriving on time started at 85% in 1999
,
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and had a huge drop to 82% in 2000.But from 2001 it began to show a slow increase tendency which
was
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increased from about 84% in 2001 to 85% in 2003.
On the other hand
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 target
acurrancy
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currency
accuracy
 had a remained trend in 1999 and 2000, which was 86%, and from 2001 it fell to 85%, and in 2003 it ended at 84.5%.
At
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 the same year ,
actual
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the actual
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 percentage
finally
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match
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target
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the target
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 and
approximately
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was approximately
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 0.5% more.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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