You need to borrow some money to pay for something you need for your work or studies. Write a letter to your bank to ask for a loan. In your letter introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money explain how you plan to pay the money back

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Dear manager, I am a young student planning to study abroad for my higher study for which I want to lend some money as

loan

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a loan

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from your

bank

Actually

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I completed my studies in Government Sr. school in Kurali. And now I aspire to take the

Compter

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Computer

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system technician course in Canada. Having said that, I need some funds for my GIC account

however

I have already paid my college fee. Now I want to make a request to the

bank

for

allowing

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apply

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bank

student loan of INR 5,00,000 so that I can fulfill my dream of higher studies

oversea

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overseas

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. On

the

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apply

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top of that, I will make sure I can pay the

lended

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lent

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money back on time or maybe before the given time as I will start working

part time

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part-time

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in foreign.

Moreover

, the college I applied to

provide

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paid practicum benefits that would help me to pay

extra

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an extra

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amount on

timely

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a timely

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basis.

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last

, I want to say that it would be really great and helpful if

bank

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the bank

a bank

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can

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help me pursue my dream. I would be happy to help with any information or questions anytime. Regards Simran

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Single Idea Per Paragraph

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity. The paragraph explaining the need for money could be split for more detail on college and GIC needs.

Complete Response

Provide more detail about your repayment plan, including specific sources of income and timelines for repayment to complete the task response.

Suitable Writing Tone

Formal and polite tone maintained throughout the letter.

Complete Response

The letter includes a clear request for a specific loan amount and purpose.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

191 words

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