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The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by slecting and reporting the features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by slecting and reporting the features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below illustrates a likely future means of house
energy
 manufacture.
Overall
,
in
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apply
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this
 process
over
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is over
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 6 steps and the first one is started
from
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by
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 removing the
gas
 in compost ferments.
Firstly
, the
gas
 is going to the storage where he is located for
further
 action.
Subsequenly
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Subsequently
,
this
gas
moving
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 in
compressor
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the compressor
a compressor
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 to fill a combustion engine.
Second
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 step
,
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apply
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 needs
in
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an
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 understanding of physics because after
combustion
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the combustion
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 engine
this
gas
have
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 to transform into mechanical
energy
.
Following
this
 step,
this
energy
 goes to the generator, which can
transfrom
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transform
this
energy
 from mechanical into electrical. Exactly,
this
 type of power is used for houses. The final stage,
based
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is based
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 on transforming electrical
energy
 from
battery
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the battery
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 to the house, so
home
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the home
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 will be provided with
energy
 from leaves, food and
scarps
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scraps
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • solar panels
  • energy storage
  • wind turbine
  • geothermal
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • grid
  • biomass
  • photovoltaic
  • smart meter
  • energy consumption
  • insulation
  • heat pump
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