The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The presented bar chart reveals the percentage of
men
, women, and
children
who consumed five portions of fruit and vegetables each day in The United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
,
women's
Change noun form
women
show examples
had the most consumption,
while
the opposite was for
children
. All three had an increasing trend throughout the year. In 2001, women had approximately 20%, and it gradually rose for the next 5
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
show examples
, before reaching its peak in 2006 at nearly 35%.
However
, it dropped by around 3% in the next year, followed by another decrease at the same number as in 2004.
On the other hand
,
Men
and
Children
started at 17% and 12 % respectively in 2001. Both remained static in 2002 and 2003 and steadily grew to their all-time high in 2007, except for
Men
which already peaked in 2006.
At the end
of the period,
Men
accounted for 26%,
while
children
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
just slightly below them.
Submitted by 000silr111 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: