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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter- -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work - say what you want the shop or company to do

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Hi Team, I'm reaching out to address an issue I have experiencing with the equipment which I have purchased from your shop. I'm a software developer and currently doing work from home. My work heavily relied on coding and typing.
However
, some keys are not working properly
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 the keyboard which directly
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 the proactive of my work. I kindly request your assistance to resolve
this
 matter promptly by either
refund
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 the
moeny
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money
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replace
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 an item with an old one. I'm willing to
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 any action from my side. Best Regards Dhivya Ravi
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coherence cohesion
The letter should maintain a single idea per paragraph to enhance clarity. Group related points together to make the letter easier to read and follow.
task achievement
Ensure that all your requests and information are clearly stated and justified. Describe how the non-functioning keys impact specific tasks in your job to provide a more complete picture.
task achievement
You've used a suitable and polite tone for a formal letter, and your intention is clear with specific requests.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, contributing to a well-structured correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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