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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter- -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work - say what you want the shop or company to do

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Hi Team, I'm reaching out to address an issue I have experiencing with the equipment which I have purchased from your shop. I'm a software developer and currently doing work from home. My work heavily relied on coding and typing.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, some keys are not working properly
in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the keyboard which directly
affecting
Wrong verb form
affects

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb affecting. Consider changing it.

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 the proactive of my work. I kindly request your assistance to resolve
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 matter promptly by either
refund
Wrong verb form
refunding

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb refund. Consider changing it.

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 the
moeny
Correct your spelling
money

If you don’t want moeny to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

or
replace
Wrong verb form
replacing

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb replace. Consider changing it.

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 an item with an old one. I'm willing to
do
Verb problem
take

There may be a verb use issue here.

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 any action from my side. Best Regards Dhivya Ravi

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coherence cohesion
The letter should maintain a single idea per paragraph to enhance clarity. Group related points together to make the letter easier to read and follow.
task achievement
Ensure that all your requests and information are clearly stated and justified. Describe how the non-functioning keys impact specific tasks in your job to provide a more complete picture.
task achievement
You've used a suitable and polite tone for a formal letter, and your intention is clear with specific requests.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, contributing to a well-structured correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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