The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The six pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
usage
for various purposes in six different regions of the world In North
America
,
water
is mainly used for industrial purposes with 48%,
while
in South
America
, the majority lies
on
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Agricultural
usage
which accounts
to
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71%. The least
water
usage
in
northern
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part of the
America
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continent is 13% which is domestic
use
, but in the southern part, 10% of the
water
goes to Industrial
use
. Similar to North
America
,
the
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significant proportion of
water
in Europe is in Industrial
usage
. Agricultural
use
in Europe is lower, at 32%,
while
domestic
use
remains at 15%.
In contrast
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
all are dominant in agricultural sectors, with percentages at 84%, 88%, and 81%. Industrial
use
in these regions is minimal with the range of 7% to 12%, and domestic
use
remain
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under 10%. In conclusion, South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
focuses
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focus
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on agricultural
usage
of
water
rather
than
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North
America
and Europe
that
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apply
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targets
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target
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industrial 
use
 of 
water
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, america, use, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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