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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: - explain why you took the job. - describe the problems that you experienced. - suggest what could be done about them.

#job #company #weeks #manager
Hi Manager, I'
m
 writing
this
 email to discuss the problem which I'
m
 facing in our company. My name is
dhivya
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Dhivya
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 and an international student, doing a
part
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part-time
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time
 job in our company. I took these
job
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jobs
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 which align with my college
time
.
In addition
, I can learn a new skill by doing a
part
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part-time
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time
 in our company. It's been
a
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two few weeks,
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that I'm
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I'
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m
 working here but I'
m
 not happy
by
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 doing
over
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overtime
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time
 work
in
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at
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the
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midnight and
also
 getting credit money for extra
hours
 shift.
Along with
 that, there is no frequent bus to reach my place.
As a result
, I'
m
 reaching late to home and college. I'
m
 eligible to work only 20
hours
 but am working more than limited
hours
 which causes
problem
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problems
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to
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 my visa status. Kindly take
an
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immediate action to resolve
this
 matter promptly and
also
requesting
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 to schedule work
hours
upto
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up to
 20
hours
. Thanks and Regards Dhivya Ravi
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea.
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Provide more detailed explanations regarding the problems and potential solutions.
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Ensure the tone remains formal and polite throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Clear greeting and closing, making the letter structure formal and suitable.
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The main concerns and requests were clearly identified, making the letter's purpose evident.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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