The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The given bar chart, which depicts in great detail, illustrates the number of
men
and women in six
age
groups
who exercised in Australia in 2010. The unit is based on percentage.
Overall
, it is clearly observable that in all
age
groups
how many
females
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of females
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that did physical activity
were
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was
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more than the number of
males
, except
age
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the age
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group
15 to 24. To commence with, the percentage of Australian
males
and females that did regular physical activity were as follow: in
age
group
25 to 34;
males
(42.2%)-females(48.9%), in
age
groups
35 to 44;
men
(39.5%)-women(52.5%), in
age
group
45 to 54;
males
(43.1%)-females(53.3%), in
age
group
55 to 64;
men
(45.1%)- women(53%)
as well as
in
age
group
65 and over;
males
(46.7%)-females(47.1%).
Thus
, the number of women
were
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was
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more than how many
men
in
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apply
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did physical activity. On the flip side, unlike other
age
groups
in
age
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the age
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group
15 to 24 the amount of
males
were
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was
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more than the proportion of females
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, age, groups, males, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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