The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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chart above illustrates the points percentages of males and females doing some activities,
while
the one below indicates the amount of time dedicated by those people to the tasks.
Firstly
, men are less involved in the kitchen compared to women, in fact, there is a difference of more than 20 points percentages among them.
Furthermore
, only 40% of boys clean,
instead
, more than 60% of people from the other gender did.
However
, fewer girls were into pet care,
although
the difference is minimal, and house repairs where the other sex is almost twice as much involved.
Lastly
, without a doubt, women spend more time doing those activities.
For example
, they spent 20 minutes more than men in cooking and cleaning.
In addition
, the time spent in pet care is slightly more in females.
Nonetheless
, men were into house repairs considerably more than women, almost four times as much.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender roles
  • Work-life balance
  • Division of labor
  • Domestic tasks
  • Stereotypes
  • Traditional roles
  • Participation rate
  • Disparity
  • Societal expectations
  • Productivity
  • Cultural norms
  • Economic implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Household chores
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