In many places new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the country side and not build home there. What is your opinion?
Undoubtedly, many cities are crowded around the world.They need many new
strucutions
but they Correct your spelling
instructions
don
not find space for them.They can build them only in Correct your spelling
do
countryside
.Add an article
the countryside
While
some people
believe that,No body should construct building
in Add an article
a building
the building
countryside
to protect it.I will discuss in Add an article
the countryside
this
essay both viewpoints and my personal opinion.
To begin
with,There are many people
need
to build Correct pronoun usage
who need
flat
or apartment for their family.They want Correct article usage
a flat
clean
and suitable Add an article
a clean
the clean
place
.If all the people
build building
in Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
on
space Correct your spelling
one
this
will causes
many problems.Change the verb form
cause
For instance
,congestion and pollution.In
addition
the view of Add a comma
addition,
place
will become very ugly.They will not be Correct article usage
the place
arrangement
.In my opinion,They should all Replace the word
arranged
for
citizens to Add a missing verb
be for
built
in Wrong verb form
build
countryside
.I think Add an article
the countryside
is
is their right.Engineers should Correct your spelling
it
put
plans to make new Verb problem
make
building
without Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
harm
Wrong verb form
harming
the
Correct article usage
apply
nature
.
However
,countryside
has Add an article
the countryside
a
beautiful Correct article usage
apply
nature
and landscape
.Some Fix the agreement mistake
landscapes
people
don
not like to make Correct your spelling
do
building
there because of many reasons.Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
For example
,They will cut many trees and plants to make space for roads and buildings.In addition
,animals will not feel comfortable because there will be a narrow area for them.Also
Add a comma
Also,
country side
is a Correct your spelling
countryside
place
for relax
and enjoyment.Replace the word
relaxation
For
example
many visitors like to go there to reduce their stress and enjoy Add a comma
example,
with
Change preposition
apply
nature
and sound
of birds.
Correct article usage
the sound
To conclude
,There should make
Verb problem
be
place
for building and Correct article usage
a place
take
care of Wrong verb form
taking
nature
.They can do
buildings in Verb problem
build
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
with out
Correct your spelling
without
harm
any creatures.Good plans for Change the verb form
harming
constructions
will make all Fix the agreement mistake
construction
people
satisfied.Submitted by mrym05411 on
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task achievement
Improve the clarity and structure of your arguments to fully and clearly address all parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure. Link your ideas more smoothly and use a variety of cohesive devices.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or relevant details to strengthen your main points.
coherence cohesion
You have provided an introduction and conclusion that frame your essay effectively.
task achievement
You've discussed both viewpoints and included your personal opinion, demonstrating a balanced approach to the task.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.