The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The charts depict a comparison of
percentage
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the percentage
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between
men
and
women
in various house chores and the
time
they take to do each task in a country.
It is clear that
there is a 20% difference in preparing meals and cleaning between
women
and
men
with 80 to 60% and 60 to 40% respectively. Most
men
prefers
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prefer
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fixing the house with close to 20% as compared to
women
with only about 5%. Both
sex
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sexes
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care for their pets equally, close to 20%. In the next chart,
women
spend almost
90minutes
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90 minutes
to cook
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cooking
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as compared to
men
who take only
60minutes
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60 minutes
to do so.
Similarly
,
women
spend
longer
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a longer
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time
to clean
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cleaning
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than
men
about
70minutes
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70 minutes
. Both care for their pet almost the same
time
about
20minutes
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20 minutes
. In summary, there is a clear relation between the percentage of
the
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apply
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house chores and
time
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the time
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both spend
to do
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doing
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it
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them
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. The
more
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higher
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percentage
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the percentage
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, the longer the
time
they spend
to perform
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performing
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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