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The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.
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The bar chart provides key information about the total
world
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production
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 by different
world
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regions
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 btween1840 and 2000. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that from 1880 to 1920
Europe
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 had the highest percentage, in 1840
Asia
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's
production
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 was 50% and the rest of the
world
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 less than 10 percentage,
Europe
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 was less than
Asia
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 and highest than other
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regions
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 40%. In 1880
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Europe
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production
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 showed a slight increase nearly 50 per cent, and
Asia
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 had a significant decline from 50% to less than 30%.
Production
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 of other
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regions
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 had increased.
According to
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 what is shown from the graph, in 1920 other
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 region's
production
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 was higher than
Asia
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's
production
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whereas
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Europe
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's
production
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 had the highest percentage. In terms of 1960
Europe
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 and the rest of the
world
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 were nearly similar under 40%. In 2000
Asia
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production
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 jumped and
Europe
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 and other
world
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regions
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 slightly decreased.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, production, regions, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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