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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ag

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ag
#percentage #households #accommodation #england #wales #summarise #information #features #comparisons #ag
The given show graph illustrates the proportion of owned and rented
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 by householders in two different countries , in a
priod
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period
 from 1918 to 2011. As
an
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in
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overall
 view, people
where
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were
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had
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not
intrested
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interested
 to rent any
houses
 in that
priod
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period
,
while
, they
attreced
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attracted
 to have their own
houses
 which had increased sharply in these years. On
one
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the one
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 hand, from 1918 to 2001, the amount of owned
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
had
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increased moderately from 25 to 67 per cent,
however
,
this
tred
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trend
 had a slight decrease which was less
5
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than 5
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percent
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per cent
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that
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in
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 2001.
On the other hand
, the majority of rented
houses
were
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decreased
mederately
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moderately
, which in 1918 there was the highest
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at
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25 per cent ,but
this
tred
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trend
had
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resulted in
a
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 worst decrease from 65
to
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to 32 ,
however
, in 2011 rented
houses
were
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decreased to 36
perccent
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per cent
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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