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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan
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pie
 chart depicts the modification in the passengers of time working adults spent on activities in different countries in 1958 and 2008.
overall
, it can be seen that the two
pie
 charts have a similar part and it has shown many different portions.
for instance
, other activities in both are less than 10% and working is the biggest part of every
pie
 chart.
on the other hand
, it is notable that sleeping in 1958 was 32% of the time
while
 in 2008 it became 25% showing high pressure on people.
however
, travel increased in 2008 but it related to working and not
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about relaxing time or all of to be family is 19% in 2008 and it was 27% that says us decreased the quality of the lifestyles. Regarding the two
pie
 charts mentioned in the first statement, working increased and it is an alarm for government policy and they have to change their management and make progress in lifestyles among people.
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