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chart depicts the modification in the passengers of time working adults spent on activities in different countries in 1958 and 2008.

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, it can be seen that the two

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charts have a similar part and it has shown many different portions.

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, other activities in both are less than 10% and working is the biggest part of every

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chart.

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, it is notable that sleeping in 1958 was 32% of the time

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in 2008 it became 25% showing high pressure on people.

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, travel increased in 2008 but it related to working and not

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about relaxing time or all of to be family is 19% in 2008 and it was 27% that says us decreased the quality of the lifestyles. Regarding the two

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charts mentioned in the first statement, working increased and it is an alarm for government policy and they have to change their management and make progress in lifestyles among people.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan

the process of Pu-erh Raw tea and Ripe tea. make a summary regarding the given diagram

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Some think that students must travel to another country in order to learn its language and customs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?