Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter to inform you that I am looking for

part time

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a part-time

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job

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in your

restaurant

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and I find me compatible for

this

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job

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. I worked a lot in many sectors

such

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as in

retail

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the retail

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area

as well as

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restaurant

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the restaurant

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area. I had a position of sales manager in

retail

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a retail

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store for 3 years. Currently, I

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have been

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working as a host in a

restaurant

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for approx 1 year.

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, I want to apply for a bartender position in your

restaurant

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because just

few

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a few

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days back I

recived

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received

my bar license and

finding

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found

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job

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for

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bar

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a bar

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person as it will give me a chance to show my work in your

restaurant

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. I

also

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hear many reputed things about your

restaurant

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thats

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that's

that

why I am interested to work here. I find

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myself

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compatible because as I told you

that

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apply

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I am currently working as a host so basically I have

restaurant

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experience and mainly I have the most important bar license for

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respected

job

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. Yours Faithfully, Simranjeet Kur

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coherence cohesion

Provide clearer transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for improved clarity.

task achievement

Elaborate more on why your experience makes you suitable for the job.

coherence cohesion

The letter includes a proper greeting and closing, which enhances its professionalism.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is suitable for a job application, reflecting professionalism and interest.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

174 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

enthusiastic application
hospitality sector
culinary arts
reliability
work under pressure
excellent customer service
flexibility in working hours
eagerness
part-time position
relevant experience
team player
communication skills
attention to detail

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