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Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

#advertisement #job #restaurant #manager #-describe #-tell #-say
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I am looking for
part time
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a part-time
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job
 in your
restaurant
 and I find me compatible for
this
job
. I worked a lot in many sectors
such
 as in
retail
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the retail
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 area
as well as
 in
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 area. I had a position of sales manager in
retail
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a retail
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 store for 3 years. Currently, I
am
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have been
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 working as a host in a
restaurant
 for approx 1 year.
Moreover
, I want to apply for a bartender position in your
restaurant
 because just
few
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a few
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 days back I
recived
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received
 my bar license and
finding
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found
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 a
job
for
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as
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bar
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a bar
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 person as it will give me a chance to show my work in your
restaurant
. I
also
 hear many reputed things about your
restaurant
thats
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that's
that
 why I am interested to work here. I find
me
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myself
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 compatible because as I told you
that
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apply
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I am currently working as a host so basically I have
restaurant
 experience and mainly I have the most important bar license for
this
 respected
job
. Yours Faithfully, Simranjeet Kur
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coherence cohesion
Provide clearer transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for improved clarity.
task achievement
Elaborate more on why your experience makes you suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a proper greeting and closing, which enhances its professionalism.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a job application, reflecting professionalism and interest.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic application
  • hospitality sector
  • culinary arts
  • reliability
  • work under pressure
  • excellent customer service
  • flexibility in working hours
  • eagerness
  • part-time position
  • relevant experience
  • team player
  • communication skills
  • attention to detail
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