Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I am looking for

part time

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a part-time

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job

in your

restaurant

and I find me compatible for

this

job

. I worked a lot in many sectors

such

as in

retail

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the retail

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area

as well as

restaurant

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the restaurant

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area. I had a position of sales manager in

retail

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a retail

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store for 3 years. Currently, I

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have been

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working as a host in a

restaurant

for approx 1 year.

Moreover

, I want to apply for a bartender position in your

restaurant

because just

few

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a few

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days back I

recived

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received

my bar license and

finding

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found

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job

for

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bar

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a bar

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person as it will give me a chance to show my work in your

restaurant

. I

also

hear many reputed things about your

restaurant

thats

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that's

that

why I am interested to work here. I find

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myself

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compatible because as I told you

that

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apply

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I am currently working as a host so basically I have

restaurant

experience and mainly I have the most important bar license for

this

respected

job

. Yours Faithfully, Simranjeet Kur

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coherence cohesion

Provide clearer transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for improved clarity.

task achievement

Elaborate more on why your experience makes you suitable for the job.

coherence cohesion

The letter includes a proper greeting and closing, which enhances its professionalism.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is suitable for a job application, reflecting professionalism and interest.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

174 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

enthusiastic application
hospitality sector
culinary arts
reliability
work under pressure
excellent customer service
flexibility in working hours
eagerness
part-time position
relevant experience
team player
communication skills
attention to detail

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Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes. Do you agree or diagree?

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to stops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. (IELTS 9, AC)

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?