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task1. The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources(OIL,COAL, GAs) of green house gas in the uk from year 1990 to 2010. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

task1. The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources(OIL,COAL, GAs) of green house gas in the uk from year 1990 to 2010. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the amount of carbon emissions from three fossil fuels
such
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 as oil,gas and coal in the UK during the years 1990 to 2010. Units are measured in
million
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tons
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.
Overall
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, Gas dominated over the other greenhouse gases and exhibited a trajectory upward trend
whereas
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, coal accounted for
reverse
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 trend throughout the given period. Significantly, coal was
on
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 the top of the list but declined to the least by the end of the year.
According to
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 the graph, Gas consistently climbed from just over 200
million
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tons
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 in 1990 to above 300
million
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tons
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 in 2010.
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, Oil showed remarkable fluctuations in the middle of the given period and declined to slightly over 200
million
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tons
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 in 2010 from about 260
million
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tons
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 in 1990.
However
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, Coal was the highest producing carbon emissions in 1990 about 300
million
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tons
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 , before falling to 200
million
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tons
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tons with synonyms.
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