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The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data provides key information about the outcomes of a survey of the United Kingdom's public figures that individuals can notice from their pictures. The graph is measured by age.
Overall
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, the majority of people in Britain can recognise the queen with a small percentage from the younger ages that cannot know her.
Also
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, the prime minister is a famous person in the British community, but you don't find lots of people between the ages of 0 to 20 that know him,
on the other hand
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, most of the adults between 41 to 60 can observe the prime minister if someone shows a picture of him. In the case of the Chancellor and Mayor of London, you barely can find someone from the group of 0 to 20 who can recognise them.
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, there is a high percentage from the group of 21 to 40 and 41 to 60.
In addition
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, among all the above mentioned, the young generation between 0 to 20 have the lowest percentage
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 all the sections, and the people between 41 to 60 are more likely to notice any picture you offer to them.

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