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The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagrams include two procedures which are natural and identical both in urban and woodland regions. It is noted from the figures that the
processess
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processes
 are in a chain including six
stages
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 with the differences between each of them. The four
stages
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 above the ground are precipitation, evaporation, transpiration and run
off
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which are reduced
as well as
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 polluted in the municipal water cycle system. The other two
stages
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 under the ground are infiltration and baseflow which are in decreasing form in
urban
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the urban
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 water cycle system.
Overall
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, there are enough differences among the
stages
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 between forested and urban water sequences. The amount of precipitation is
same
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the same
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 both for the forested and urban areas but the other
stages
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 have variations
such
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 as, there are reduced evaporation and transpiration in metropolitan
area
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areas
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comparing
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compared
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 to the forested
area
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areas
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.
On the other hand
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, the processes of infiltration and baseflow are normal in forested
location
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locations
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whereas
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 they
get
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are
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 reduced in urban
region
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regions
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.
Finally
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, the
run off
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runoff
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 is under
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the well
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well
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good
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condition
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conditions
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 in
forest
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the forest
a forest
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 which turns
into
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apply
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polluted
ones
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apply
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in
urban
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the urban
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 section.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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