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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of UK citizen's expenditure on
Food
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 and
drinks
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,
Restaurants
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 and
hotels
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, and entertainment in various
age
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 groups in the year 2004.
Overall
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, the British
people
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 spent most of their money on
food
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 and
drinks
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 regardless of
age
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 except youth, tend to spend on
restaurants
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 and
hotels
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 in the given period. Noticeably, as the
age
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 increased, consumption of
food
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 and
drinks
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 exhibited a consistent growth
whereas
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restaurants
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 and
hotels
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 accounted for the reverse trend.
According to
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 the graph, the young
people
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 of the UK spent more on
restaurants
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 and
hotels
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 which was slightly less than 15 %, and for
food
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 and
drinks
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, and entertainment , total spending ranged between 5-10 percentage.
Furthermore
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, entertainment reached a peak of around 23 % in the
age
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 group of senior citizens , before falling to less than 15 % in
people
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 older than 75
years
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 in 2004.
However
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, the total spending on
restaurants
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 and
hotels
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 decreased to 2 % in the late middle-aged category and after 75
years
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, it climbed to 7%.
Additionally
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, the expenditure on
food
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 and
drinks
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 gradually increased to 23-24 % above 75
years
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 old
people
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 from 7% in the
age
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 less than 30
years
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 during the given year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drinks, restaurants, hotels, age, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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