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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares data about the percentage of money that 4 various countries spent on 5 different items in 2009.
Overall
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, it was crucial that housing was the most important factor
instead
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 of health care in 2009.
According to
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 the diagram, Housing, the most essential element, in the
USA
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 hit just over 25%;
then
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 the
UK
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,
Japan
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, and
Canada
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 respectively reached nearly 24, 23, and 21 per cent. The second part that touched the most portion was Food, which scored the highest fraction in
Japan
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 by roughly 24%;
thereafter
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, the
UK
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,
Canada
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, and the
USA
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 recorded one-fifth, 15% ,and almost 14%. Later for Transportation
Canada
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 was the main country owing to the fact that it reported the same proportion as its housing after that, the
USA
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, the
UK
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, and
Japan
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 scored approximately 17%, 15%, and 10%. The graph demonstrates that clothing reached nearly the same portion for
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, the
UK
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 , and
Japan
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 by roughly 5%; and the
USA
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 hit the minimum percentage at approximately 3%;
in contrast
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, for health care, the
USA
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 reported about 7%;
then
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Japan
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 and
Canada
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 touched the same portion at just under 5% and the
UK
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 hit the tiny fraction.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, uk, japan, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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