The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in

six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion
in
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of
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various six continents of the world of
water
used divided into three categories industrial, agricultural and domestic
use
.
Overall
, it is remarkable that agricultural
use
is the main factor of
water
in every area; meanwhile,
the
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minority of
population
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the population
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used
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uses
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water
for domestic
purpose
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.
To begin
with the industrial
use
, the percentage was merely 7
percent
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per cent
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in Africa which was around 7 times less
as
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than in
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north
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North
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America
.
Similarly
, in
south
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South
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America
the amount was 10
percent
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which is as twice
as
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much as
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Central
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in Central
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Asia
as well as
in Europe there was 53
percent
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per cent
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which was 5 times much more than
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in southeast
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southeast
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Southeast
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Asia
. Moving to
the
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apply
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domestic
use
, there was the exact same percentage in central
Asia
and southeast
Asia
at 7
percent
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. In Africa was only 9
percent
.
In addition
, the proportion in
north
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America
, south
America
and Europe was 13, 19 and 15 respectively.
Lastly
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in agricultural
use
, the
amount
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number
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of people
used
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who used
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water
was 81, 84 and 88 in
southeast
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Southeast
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Asia
, Africa
along
with
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central
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Central
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Asia
respectively. In Europe, there was
modest
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a modest
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15
percent
.
While
in
south
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South
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America
there was 71
percent
which was just under the amount in
north
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North
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America
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, percent, america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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