The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion
in
various six continents of the world of Change preposition
of
water
used divided into three categories industrial, agricultural and domestic use
.
Overall
, it is remarkable that agricultural use
is the main factor of water
in every area; meanwhile, the
minority of Correct article usage
a
population
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the population
used
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uses
water
for domestic purpose
.
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purposes
To begin
with the industrial use
, the percentage was merely 7 percent
in Africa which was around 7 times less Change the spelling
per cent
as
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than in
north
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North
America
. Similarly
, in south
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South
America
the amount was 10 percent
which is as twice Change the spelling
per cent
as
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much as
Central
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in Central
Asia
as well as
in Europe there was 53 percent
which was 5 times much more than Change the spelling
per cent
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in southeast
southeast
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Southeast
Asia
. Moving to the
domestic Correct article usage
apply
use
, there was the exact same percentage in central Asia
and southeast Asia
at 7 percent
. In Africa was only 9 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. In addition
, the proportion in north
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North
America
, south America
and Europe was 13, 19 and 15 respectively.
Lastly
in agricultural Add a comma
Lastly,
use
, the amount
of people Change the quantifier
number
used
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who used
water
was 81, 84 and 88 in southeast
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Southeast
Asia
, Africa along
with
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apply
central
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Central
Asia
respectively. In Europe, there was modest
15 Correct article usage
a modest
percent
. While
in south
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South
America
there was 71 percent
which was just under the amount in north
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North
America
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, percent, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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