The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table graph illustrates the
age
limit in six countries when men
and women
take
Wrong verb form
took
retirement
from work in 2003, where the nations are Australia, United
Correct article usage
the United
states
, Japan, Italy, France and Korea.
Capitalize word
States
To begin
with, Korea had the highest retirement
age
in 2003 both in men
and women
cases, where the retirement
age
for men
were
68 and 8 Change the verb form
was
months
and for women
were
67 and 2 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
months
. Moving forward, Japan and Italy were on
second number in both categories. The number for Change preposition
in
men
were
67 and 4 Change the verb form
was
months
and for women
were 66 and 9 months
in both countries.
Continue it, United
States was in third position and Australia was in fourth number. Where the Correct article usage
the United
age
group for male
were 65 and 6 Fix the agreement mistake
males
months
and
Correct word choice
apply
female
were 64 and 2 Fix the agreement mistake
females
months
in former
country Add an article
the former
and
Correct word choice
apply
for
Change preposition
apply
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
64
and 1 month and Add a missing verb
were 64
for
Change preposition
apply
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
63
and 5 Add a missing verb
were 63
months
in the latter country. On the contrary
, the retirement
age
was 57 and 4 months
in men
and 56 and 9 months
in France.
Overall
, it can be seen easily every countries
Change to a singular noun
country
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
different
Correct article usage
a different
retirement
age
except Japan and Italy.Submitted by taniamall786 on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women, retirement, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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