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The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table graph illustrates the
age
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 limit in six countries when
men
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 and
women
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take
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retirement
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 from work in 2003, where the nations are Australia,
United
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states
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, Japan, Italy, France and Korea.
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 with, Korea had the highest
retirement
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age
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 in 2003 both in
men
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 and
women
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 cases, where the
retirement
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age
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 for
men
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were
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 68 and 8
months
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 and for
women
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were
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was
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 67 and 2
months
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. Moving forward, Japan and Italy were
on
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in
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 second number in both categories. The number for
men
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were
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 67 and 4
months
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 and for
women
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 were 66 and 9
months
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 in both countries. Continue it,
United
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 States was in third position and Australia was in fourth number. Where the
age
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 group for
male
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males
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 were 65 and 6
months
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and
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apply
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female
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females
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 were 64 and 2
months
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 in
former
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the former
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 country
and
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apply
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for
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apply
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male
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males
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64
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were 64
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 and 1 month and
for
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apply
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female
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females
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63
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were 63
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 and 5
months
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 in the latter country.
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, the
retirement
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age
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 was 57 and 4
months
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 in
men
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 and 56 and 9
months
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 in France.
Overall
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, it can be seen easily every
countries
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country
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have
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has
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different
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a different
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retirement
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age
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 except Japan and Italy.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women, retirement, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • gender disparity
  • average
  • countries
  • comparisons
  • illustrates
  • features
  • trends
  • outliers
  • noteworthy
  • notable differences
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • legal factors
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