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The tables below give information about the consumption and production of potatoes in different world regions in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about the consumption and production of potatoes in different world regions in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two given tables provide information about the
amount
 of
potato
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potatoes
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 produced and consumed in five different regions across the world in the year
of
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2006.
Overall
, the
number of
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consumption
 of
potatoes
 in
Europe
 was significantly higher than
other
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in other
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 regions.
Similarly
, the
amount
 of
potatoes
 consumed in Asia
and
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Oceania, and
Europe
 were the highest
number
.
According to
 the first table, the highest
number
 in the
consumption
 of
potatoes
 belonged to
Europe
 at 96.1 kilograms for each person,
this
number
 was followed by the
amount
 of
potatoes
 consumed individually in North
America
, which was 57.9 kilograms.
Conversely
, the figure for the
consumption
 of
this
 vegetable in Asia and Oceania, and South and Central
America
 was much lower, which was only 25.8 kg and 23.6 kg
for
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a
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person, respectively.
Additionally
, Africa had
the
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a
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significant
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 low
consumption
 of
potatoes
 in 2006, at only 14.1 kilograms per person Turning into the second table, the production of the potato industry in Asia
and
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Oceania, and
Europe
 was the most productive, with the
amount
 of potato produced was 131.2
million
 and 126.3
million
 in 2006, respectively.
Meanwhile
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 the
number
 of
potatoes
 produced in North
America
 was only 24.7
million
during
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in
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 2006.
Similarly
, the figure for the production of
potatoes
 in Africa and South and Central
America
 was 16.4
million
 and 15.6
million
, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, number, consumption, potatoes, europe, america, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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