The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the mean
retirement
age
of
males
and
females
, which were available in 6
countries
(Australia, United States, Japan, Italy,
France
, and Korea) in the year 2003.
Overall
, Korean job holders get
retirement
later,
whereas
in
France
it was earlier than the other
countries
.
On the other hand
,
women
's quit from job
age
was on average 1 year lower in all
countries
. The highest
retirement
age
was in Korea at 68
years
and 8
months
for men,
whereas
for
women
it was 67
years
and 2
months
. The lowest
retirement
age
could be seen in
France
at 57
years
and 4
months
for
males
, for
women
it was less than 3
months
from 57
years
.
France
's
retirement
age
was almost 10
years
faster than the other 5
countries
. In Australia,
women
retired at the
age
of 63
years
and 5
months
,
however
, for
males
it was just above 64
years
. Japan and Italy shared the same
age
retirement
time for both
males
and
females
, which was 67
years
and 4
months
for
males
, and 66
years
and 9
months
for
females
. For the USA, it was in the middle position among all
countries
, where it was 64
years
and 2
months
for
females
, and 65
years
and half a year for
males
.
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  • retirement age
  • gender disparity
  • average
  • countries
  • comparisons
  • illustrates
  • features
  • trends
  • outliers
  • noteworthy
  • notable differences
  • economic factors
  • social factors
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