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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compared the five different
age
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groups
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 of
people
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 who accessed the
internet
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 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis in the
UK
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 between 2003 and 2006.
It is clear that
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the 16
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age
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group
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 in the
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 accounted for the highest points of the whole graph over the four-year period.
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, aged 25-44 and 55-64 saw the largest rises in
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users
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 over the same period. In 2003, the percentage of
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 from 16-24
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groups
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 was exactly 80%, compared to precisely 50% of
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 aged 25-44. The figures for the youngest
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 and
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those aged
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 25-44 saw only a small increase of a full 10%. In 2006,
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 accessing the
internet
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from
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aged 16-24 were by far the highest in terms of
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 in the
UK
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, and the second one was the older
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group
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, 25- 44
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group
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. The proportion of
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users
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 gaining access from three other
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groups
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,45-54, 55-64, 65 and oversaw a relatively small rise in
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 between 2003 and 2004 in the
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. In 2005, these
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groups
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 used exactly 50%, 40%, and approximately 15% respectively.
In2006
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In 2006
, the figure for
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those aged
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 45-54 reached nearly 55%,
while
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 55-to 64-years-old
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groups’
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users
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 figures increased dramatically and the percentage of the oldest
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group
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 fluctuated slightly, 65-years-old and over.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, people, internet, uk, group, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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