The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart illustrates the proportions of Chinese males and females studying in
further
education
(full-time or part-time) during the
20-years
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20-year
period.
Overall
, the percentages of men studying part-time
education
declined,
while
those of full-time
education
inclined.
By contrast
, the
numbers
of women enrolling in part-time
education
were as same as those of full-time study. In 1970 and 1971, the
numbers
of men studying part-time and full-time
program
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programs
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stood at 100,0000 and close to 100,000. From 1980 to 1981, those
of
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enrolling in part-time study dropped to about 900,000,
while
those studying in full-time
program
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programs
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increased to around 200,000. In 1990 and 1991, the figures
of
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part-time and full-time studies both climbed up to nearly 950,000 and 300,000. The
numbers
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number
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of female students studying in part-time and part-time
education
started at almost 790,000,
while
those of full-time study
stuidents
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students
stood at around 90,000 in 1970. During the
21-years
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21-year
period from 1980 to 1991, the
numbers
of part-time and full-time
education
climbed up gradually, standing at almost 1200,000 and close to 390,000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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